[Hệ Tiếng Anh] My diary ( Help me to check for errors )

[Ayra]

Welcome!! This will be the 1st entry for this blog...so enjoy...

Life is unpredictable, you can't predict the future...you won't know what is going to happen in the next few seconds nor the next few miliseconds...I guess that's why we are told to appreciate what we have nowadays. If it's gone this time, there might not be another chance for you to start things all over again. I'm appreciating what I have now, but are you doing so? Maybe you are, I don't know. I don't hope to see you going down the drain...Sometimes, branded, prestigious ain't what you need, what you need now is to do what you are suppose to do and achieve what you want. I know each person should have their own dream but it might not turn out as it is and i can be sure that you'll be very very very disappointed.

I've tried having faith in a lot of things, but it didn't turn out as it is suppose to be, so I guess that's when I started not to believe it certain things.

Just went out yumcha with HC, just drank a little coffe. Was quite full from dinner, know what I had for dinner? "cơm bụi" !!! That's what! It's quite a long story why I ended up eating "cơm bụi" for dinner...

First, this morning I add very little breakfast so ended up very hungry during lunch. So I packed a pack of bimbim and ate in the room. It was quite a huge packet so indirectly that causes me to be very full during time. I didn't packed for dinner. So I went back to my room and watched some short movies till around 9pm. T called and asked me wanna go for sth to eat or not, I was hungry then so I went out to meet her up at C Block....So that's how I ended up having "cơm bụi" for dinner.
Well, it's not a long story actually...just exaggerating....hehe

Gotta go now...T just told me not sleep so late...I'll be a panda tomorrow morning...So I'll post more next time...

[Ayra]

Came back to college in the early morning, and I was sleeping all the way from home till my block in college. Don't have a single idea why am I so sleepy! Maybe I'm evolving to become a pig...>"< In actual, there should be 6 hours of class but I only attend 2 hours of Eco. Firstly because Acc class has been replaced by Mock Practical Exam and secondly, I skipped Stats class. I don't think even half the class went...Mr T is going to be so heart-broken...Talking about the ẽam...It's just so stupid! I don't mean the mock but me! I know the procedures 'cause I've just read it before the exam but when I'm doing it---it's totally another story! I forgot some of the procedures, but still I got thru it. Unfortunately, someone took my test tube S3 when I left it at the water-bath. Damn! I looked around but don't seem to see it so I gave up. Well, I ended up making up the result. Hopefully it's correct...Whoever that fella is.... T.T Thank you for screwing up!!

[rainie89]

what do you mean by "screw up" ?
uhm, this kind of weather may cause sleepy feeling, because just like you, I felt asleep all the time at class even I had slept all morning at home.Today I was still slightly rainning and it started to bring a breath of winter, even it's just a mark but I was so inspired with the cold air, ...
Can you tell me your class? :)

[Ayra]

what do you mean by "screw up" ?


uhm ... to make a mess

Here is my new house ... i mean "room". :yo43:

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I had this new room 3 days ago. My favorite colors are hot pink, black and white, so I chose to surround myself in my favorite colors to make my room a place I would enjoy being in. I designed it myself along with my roomate. The only bad thing (we think) about it is the ugly standard furniture, you see!

Can you tell me your class? :)
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[rainie89]

beautiful! I think you might have designer-eyes, I wonder if this would be a room in a dormitory? (because there's a two ..two.. i don't know, two-floor bed :D ) How can you decorate all those things?


uhm, when can we meet, tell me here is quicker B-)

[Ayra]

This is the last and final paper for my AS. Hope I'll do well in it...I don't wanna be disappointed like before...Bless me! I was studying chemistry before blogging, but I don't feel like sleeping at all. :yo40: This is just so bad...I wanna sleep!!! I'll be craving for some good night sleep after AS...This is a MUST for me, no excuses for not doing so!! My weekend is quite a disaster...everything wasn't going fine at all. Hmm..actually not everything, just certain things are disrupting me. Thanks for making my weekend and also teaching me a LESSON!! Hurmph. I've learnt my lesson the hard way. But I think whoever did that would feel quite satisfied for the successful attempy. Congrats!!--take it as a compliment from me. :yo144:


beautiful! I think you might have designer-eyes, I wonder if this would be a room in a dormitory? (because there's a two ..two.. i don't know, two-floor bed :D ) How can you decorate all those things?


uhm, when can we meet, tell me here is quicker B-)

Yeah, thanks for your nice comments. I have been kinda busy over the past while. My basement's not in dormitory, it's a part of "nhà chủ". This is what the room looked like when we moved in (we gutted this right away!!!). My friend put up some more lights and outlets for me, Up went the insullation and peg board walls, put s few hidden stamp on the wall .... ect When you do this yourself, you'll really love it :yo123:

You know what? It's very nice of you to join me. But there's a "sensitive" reason of me to see you. However I will value the friendship between us but if you don't, I can't do anything to help. Take care! :yo91:

[rainie89]

Of course, I like to decorate my room too. I wonder if you like to use perfuming flowers for your lovely room? they will make it more charming !

anyway, it's up to you. I dun't care and dun't fair ;;) It's glad for me to talk English with everybody

[WhiteSneak]

Being working too hard on education and as a result my body has suffered. Every time i look in the mirror, i see i am lack of physical activity and i cannot fit into my clothes anymore[Only registered and activated users can see links] I keep promising myself that i will work out more often, and i keep my guilt feeling at bay with random and rare bursts of physical activity that feel like they are killing me. [Only registered and activated users can see links]

[Ayra]

Dear Mom, can you realize that it is the first time I have ever phoned you without any reason since coming here? Can you realize that it is the first time I have ever replied you with such a gentle and obedient voice since the day I went far from you?

I was born with such a soft voice. My soft voice was used to say sweet words to you, my friends and all people around me. However, now I hate it. My heart is shouting, full of anger and suspicion but why my voice keeps that way. I hate my used-to-be-sweet smile, my used-to-be-gentle voice; I hate myself now. If only I did not need to use them.

Still, I have to speak. Talking with you, I try to be so surly, disobedient and to disapprove all your care until you get mad, and my pain is open and I cry. I love you and others but I cannot feel others reliable any more. A certain fear of being left and disappointed always covers me.

However, I cannot expect this hard situation gives me a chance to stand up. A new extremely busy life with my newborn niece is shocking me. Only taking care of her and finishing the daily homework take me all days and nights. I hardly have time for sleep and no time for being sunk in my own lonely world as usual. Every day I run around and sometimes I feel I can die of overworking.

Mommy, I can stay still because it is my chance to realize one of my biggest dreams - being in good groove with Sister. The time Sister and I lived together was not long and is it why our passion for the other keeps coming in and then going out like the tide? Many times, we argue seriously and maybe I would give up that dream if it were not for what you tell me “Dear, I brought you to this world because I need your love and I need you to calm down your dear Sister.” It is my luck now because my married sister comes here to study, my chance to share with her, to fulfill your desire and especially to be beside my little niece. My smile and optimism now play such an important part in her mood. So, let me smile and hope for the best.

Nevertheless, sometimes everything bursts out. My niece needs everything done quickly or she will cry bitter tears. To make it worse, I am such a slow person, and I seem not to belong to this real world. I never concentrate on doing something and just want to be alone in my own shells. Therefore, Sister keeps shouting at me. I always easily feel being hurt with hard words. I cannot put up with this life anymore. So much hard-thought-requiring exercises and housework are already too enough; why cannot I receive a little bit understanding? Why cannot such a little dream of fulfilling at the same time my responsibility at home and class be done? My mind is frozen because of lacking sleep and being stressed, which makes everything worse…

Naturally, I thought of you, and in all of a sudden, you phoned me, Mom. You save me.

I do not know why I run away from your care; I want your love very much but uncertain feeling keeps pushing me back. Finally, I have called you, for the first time like this. I do not want to let you and sister know I am crying because both of you will be worried about me. I just want to hear your sweet voice; I just want to be cherished by your love; that is too enough. Mommy, please give me strength; I will not stop try my best unless I know I have reached my limit.

Mommy, sleep well. Do not worry about your two daughters and niece. Everything will work out, just fine.

[rainie89]

Ayra, ayra, why don't you become the leader of 1 English club ;;) I think this will be a good idea and I can help you to support this club, I want to attract Isers. How do you think about this?

[WhiteSneak]

Ayra, ayra, why don't you become the leader of 1 English club ;;) I think this will be a good idea and I can help you to support this club, I want to attract Isers. How do you think about this?

Leading is different than planning, organizing because leading is focused on influencing people. [Only registered and activated users can see links]
In this case you should say: "If I run an English club, can you be my MC?" [Only registered and activated users can see links]

[rainie89]

@WS: okay, but I think one can be a MC only if one has ability of a leader and running the club. Otherwise, he/she must be so enthusiastic in working with the club everyweek. Unfortunately, I'm not able to be like that, I just can be a member, a supporter or so on. I hope we can find out other heroes to devote a great activity for us again :-D

[Ayra]

Sorry about the delay in response. I forgot to check this thread in the past few days. Speaking of english club, you can recruit me as a member but very slim chance that I will become a MC unless you insist/threaten me/bash me/etc, I have been working for a while.

[papen]

lol if it's a diary, why do you care so much about errors?? Just chill and release your feeling.

Btw, it's " talking to you. " not "talking with you"
there's no " too enough " in english. just use "that's enough".
"a little bit understanding", the correct one is " a little bit of understanding"
My mind is frozen because lacking of sleep
"I want your love very much but uncertain feeling keeps pushing me back"
use pushing me away. when you use "back", it create a misunderstanding that it push you back to your want... i dun noe how to explain >.<

you need to be careful and consider when you need to use past and present tense bcoz some sentences have wrong tense. For example, when you called your mom. you didn't want her to worry about you, so you should continue using past tense instead of using present tense to tell your feeling. Even though, you still think like that in the present, but it's still wrong in writing a proper essay. However, in conversation, blog, forum, etc, people doesn't care much about it.

lastly
good luck with life and be strong,

[rainie89]

lol if it's a diary, why do you care so much about errors?? Just chill and release your feeling.

Btw, it's " talking to you. " not "talking with you"
there's no " too enough " in english. just use "that's enough".
"a little bit understanding", the correct one is " a little bit of understanding"
My mind is frozen because lacking of sleep
"I want your love very much but uncertain feeling keeps pushing me back"
use pushing me away. when you use "back", it create a misunderstanding that it push you back to your want... i dun noe how to explain >.<

you need to be careful and consider when you need to use past and present tense bcoz some sentences have wrong tense. For example, when you called your mom. you didn't want her to worry about you, so you should continue using past tense instead of using present tense to tell your feeling. Even though, you still think like that in the present, but it's still wrong in writing a proper essay. However, in conversation, blog, forum, etc, people doesn't care much about it.

lastly
good luck with life and be strong,

Uhm I think that she made this diary to pratise English, so of course, she might have made mistakes. It's so great to have people like you take care and fix those errors. Then, we can help each other to improve English and that's the reason why I like your correction very much!
Moreover, even I care much about my writings, I still make mistakes because I don't have basic knowledge of grammers >.< so I wish to have my own tutor that can help me to check errors all the time :))
Thank for your contribution and you can fix my post if it's necessary :-P

[papen]

loll..

"she might have made mistakes" --> "she might make some mistakes."

"It's so great to have people like you take care and fix those errors" --> "it's great to have people like you to take care and fix these error".. because you already said "this diary". the best is using "the" because you already knew which diary. it's already specific. get what i mean? you only use this/that, these/those if you don't know. same for a/an.

"Then, we can help each others to improve English and that's the reason why I like your correction very much!"

"I still make some mistakes because I don't have any basic knowledge of grammars >.< therefore I wish to have my own tutor that can help me to check errors all the time" (don't use "so" in the beginning of a sentence. same for but/and)

thank you / thanks. if you say thank (without s), it's impolite.

P.S: thank you for your comment. i tell you, language is about understanding. please, here is not english class. don't worry too much . besides, you're a liar for telling me that your don't have " basic knowledge " =P

the best way to learn about grammar is reading. when you read, you will remember when to use "to", "for", "with" because they're hard. remember, reading is for grammar, not new words. even if you don't understand, GUESS the meaning of the sentence. if you don't understand, then guess what the paragraph is talking about. if you still don't understand, throw it aside =P
by the way, if you can, learn fast reading. I can read 4 pages of an essay in less than 5 minutes. it calls skimming in english :X, i think vietnamese calls it " đọc lướt qua " xD

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register an account, go to forum and ask for a pen pal. Then go to learning languages, create a new topic. You can check other topics out as well to get some general knowledge of what to do.

most people come to this forum for learning a new language/culture/ make friends from different countries. So feel free to have fun xD

we all use simple words. don't worry too much about not understanding.

[Ayra]

I have a small story! Yesterday, i went to school, it was the break time, I went to the school canteen, and intended to buy a loaf of bread! but I couldn't. I am too short and small to "chen", so I had my classmate buy for me and went out to wait. There was a young boy, he asked me "I will help you, bé!! " Oh my God, I am older than him! How can he ... ! I said : " thanks,brother, i can manage!" haha! His face turned orange and then red! hi hi hi! Poor him!

Thank you papen, you gave us a great help. :yo64:

By the way, where is WhiteSneak? I don't see him very often?

[papen]

haha. i think you made his day became an unlucky one xD
anyway, i think "chen" is "cut queue" which my friends and i always use when we want to buy something fast (damn, you always have to queue in here >.<). but i dont think there's a queue in your school's canteen. How's about using "sneak in"? xD

[Ayra]

Through the year, there are many celebrations such as Christmas, women’s day, .. but which is the most important celebration for Vietnam people is Tet holiday, a traditional operation of Vietnam country. In this day, children will receive lucky money in red envelopes from their parent. Every year, my mother goes to flower market and she brings a box of peach blossom and apricot blossom, my father make square glutinous rice cake at home, square glutinous rice cake is a mix of green beans, fatty folk and sticky rice covered by banana leaf, then fixed by thin wood lines - sure you know what it is :yo123:. My brother and me only have one responsibility that is decorate the house after sweep the floor cleanly. I also went to the flower market and bought a Kumquat Tree for my house. And I think it was quite beautiful and I bought it quite cheap hehe’ That was the first time I had bought it to prepare for Tet holiday for my house. The years before, my dady often did that. I don’t know why but at that time I felt that I really became an adult. That sounds so funny :yo81: . My grandmother go to the pagoda to pray for peace, happiness, lucky and thriving and healthy in family. Streets are decorated with lines of colorful lights, market become dense with many people. The Tet is divided to 3 periods: Tất niên, Giao thừa and Tân niên. In the last night day of the old year, people sit together to eat cake, tell fun stories preparing to wait for and wellcome a new year. On the altar, a full fruit dish with papay, mango, coconut, water melon….and incense. After once hour to new year, everybody go to the pagoda to gather “Loc” (????), then come back home with a branch tree, which is represent to symbolize lucky and happiness. Now, a new year is coming soon again. I wish all ISVNU students the health and happiness. I hope it is not late to say: “Happy new year”. :yo91:

[papen]

children will receive "lucky money" in red envelopes
my mother goes to a flower market
my father makes square glutinous rice cake at home
lol justl write: my father makes " bánh trưng " - sure you know what it is :P
it's too long and im lazy to fix it :P

My brother and I only have one responsibility
after we has sweeped the floor cleanly
I bought it to prepare for Tet holiday in my house
The years before --> Use "many" instead of "the".. because I don't know which "years" you talking about.
I don’t know why but at that time --> this pharse can make reader confuse and they would think that time is the year your dad did it. Just say: I dont know why but i feel i become more mature.

markets become dense with many people
The Tet is divided into 3 periods
On the altar table
After once hour to new year --> i don't understand this sentence :(
then come back home with a branch tree which symbolizes luck and happiness

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Is this diary of Arya ?

[WhiteSneak]

Hi friend. Really it ís very bad news that scientists fear the bird flu virus may mutate to become highly infectious through human to human contact, possibly killing tens of millions worldwide. Our professor said: We have to be well prepared to mitigate the spread and minimize consequences on humans so keep concentrate on it. In every class, you student should follow my example - wearing on your mask [Only registered and activated users can see links]

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[Ayra]

It's raining like hell out there and I have to go to school in 1 hour...I hate rain, seriously... O my beautiful fall, why did you leave me behind? I hate that ******* old winter hag...

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Ís that Dr. Lien?? something is weird here ... He cut hís classes alot :01: